Powerful+Writing!

//**These narratives were chosen by our class as the most powerful from each table. See if you can find the strategies in each one that make these stories powerful. Can you emulate some of these strategies in your own writing?**//

As I walked into the capitol I saw a security guard who made us go threw a security check. At the capitol we had to go through a security check. It was weird. First, we saw a George Washington statue. I wondered why George Washington was there (And why he was wearing sandles and painting I did not think he wore sandles or painted). We went up to the second floor. We went in the senate chamber. The George Washington statue looked small from the second floor. I wondered what they did in the senate chamber.
 * At the Capitol (LR) 09/29/2009**

Now we are on the third floor. Up there is the state library room where the governor can go to read books. Also, the state geologist room where they study rocks and minerals. We went by the upper senate chamber. On the way down we watched videos. That was a great day at the capitol.P.S( If I was the governor changes would be made.)

One day I called Megan and Alexa to play at my house. I waited for about five minutes and then they answered their phones. I asked them, "Do you want to come play at my house?". They put the phones down and went to go ask their mother and they said, "sure". So, Megan and Alexa picked up the phone and they told me, "sure". We would be over there in about fifteen minutes.
 * The Day That I Had a Fun Day!!! (B.E. 9/29/2009)**

So while I was waiting for them I watched some T.V. I watched T.V. for about fifteen minutes. Then I heard the doorbell ring and a knock at the door. I got up and went to go answer it and there stood Megan and Alexa starring straight at me. So I said, "Come in, come in". Then Megan said, "Wow! Your house is so cool, Brittany!" "Alexa, you can change in my bathroom and Megan you can either change in my room or you can wait for Alexa to get done and go in my bathroom and change." Just then, Megan and I heard Alexa come out of the bathroom. Megan said, "You're done?" "Yeah," said Alexa. "OK!, are you going in there to change, Megan?" "Yes, just a minute." Then she walked into the bathroom and shut the door. While I was waiting for Megan to get done changing I went to go get Megan and Alexa a towel for when we were done swimming in my pool.

The last night we were at the beach we took the dogs for a run on the beach. It was dark and they loved it. It was extremely hard to run in the mushey sand. They ran so fast that if you tripped they would pull you in the sand. We had a blast and so did the dogs. We played in the sand for a long time with them. Then we stopped and walked a little bit.
 * The Beach (C.A. 9/26/2009)**

We walked down to the shore with the dogs. We let them get in the water. They seemed to like it but, I don't know. They did not like waves, but they liked the water. We played with them a little and it was loads of fun. We all had a blast, especially Lady and Aldie. After they played in the water it was getting dark so we started walking up the beach.

After that we ran some more to get the dogs to dry off. If you feel, they would pull you again. We did that to have fun and help them dry off. We would run a long way one way and come back and then run the other way for a long time and then we got tired and it got dark.

So, we headed back to the camper. We all had fun and so did the dogs. I said, "I wish this beach trip could last forever, but it can't". Mom said, "Me too!"

One day I went to the beach with my family and we went to a beach supply shop three days later. I picked out a red pirate hat with silver spots. My brother and sister each got a shark tooth necklace. After we picked our souvineers we went to go buy them with my mom and dad. When we got to the cash register there were a few people in front of us.
 * The Shock (HL 09/09/2009)**

So we waited and while we were waiting my mom handed me a flashlight and said, "I can't get this to turn on, will you try?". I said, "Yes". I pushed the button up and I felt a big shock go up my arm. The shock felt like a million bees going up my arm. So I dropped the silver flashlight. I looked at my mom and she was laughing.

Then I said, "You tricked me". She looked at me and smiled her joking smile. Then we went over and did it to Jordan and Bryson. Then we all started laughing. The end! Maybe I didn't know (because I'm still alive)!

Non-Fiction Essays

Introduction Do you know how a person moves? Well I do they move by our bones. I first thought it was wierd but now it does not. Thanks for choosing to read my essay on a person's movement.
 * The Person's Movement**

How They Move How we move is by our bones. I want bones so I can move and because I do not want to be like jelly. I love our bones and how they help us move. We have 206 bones. And that is how a person moves. Thank you for learning.

Why We Need To Move Do you think it is important to move. I do because we would not be able to play. Why we need to move is because we need our exersize. And that is why we need to move. Thank you for learning about why we need to move.

How To Keep Our Bones Healthy Do you want to know how to keep our bones healthy? Well today I am going to tell you how. How to keep your bones healthy is by eating healthy. You can do this by eating fruits and vegetables. But you can only eat one piece of candy a day. This important thing I am telling you, make sure you do it. Thank you for staying healthy.

Conclusion Now you are ready to make your own essay on a persons movement. Thank you so much for reading and learning my essay. I am letting you go on your own. Now you are going to write your own essay. Thank you and I hope you learned a lot. Other people should care about this because we want healthy bones. (HB 11/10/2009)

In Progress... Check back later to read the rest of the story. One Friday Cortney was standing behind a blue square desk. She was standing up starring and making funny faces at me. Using a pink pencil to write down observations of me. She is making funny faces at me and plugging her nose. She was laying her head down on her table. She was wearing a white shirt,black vest,blackish-blue pants, and white tennis shoes. Which reminded me of space. Her hair was flopping down in front of her face when she started writing. (HL 11/10/2009)

**Persuasive Writing**

Dear, Mr.Larson Many people don't relize that Kara was just trying to tell the truth. Kara was sort of rude because it is rude to tell every body in the school that he dose not teach anything in his class.

Some reasons that Mr.Larson should not be mad at Kara are she was just telling the truth, she didn't mean it necessarily ,she was also trying to say it in a non hurt full way and she was just trying to tell kids he did not teach anything in his class.

Kara was right because Kara was just trying to tell the kids that he dose not teach in his class.... EVER! Mr.Larson is getting mad because Kara just told true facts, that he dose not teach. Plus Kara was mad at her family not Mr.Larson.

Kara was doing the right thing because she was just trying to tell the whole school that he does not teach so that way they can fire him and ge a new teacher or tell him he actully has to teach to the class insted of them sitting there all day and do nothing all day so when it comes to test time they will know what to do insted of failing the test. Why is Mr.Larson getting mad at Kara when she is trying to help and remind Mr.Larson of his carear?

Sincerely, Kara's Mom **(M.K. 11/17/2009)**

Dear Andrew Jackson, Many people don’t realize that the Cherokee people are just like us. But in a different way. I’m right because they should at least have some of there land back. you are wrong Andrew Jackson because they never did anything to us. So in this letter I’m asking you to let the Cherokee people come back.

We should not let the Cherokee people stay where they are, because a lot of them are dying in the winter. It is a very sad time for them, because old and new people are dying. But the worst thing for them is when the babies die. Now I know that you don’t like people dying. They are like your wife when she died.

So you are wrong because you made them go and now there all dying. But the thing is. Is that they never did any thing to us. So what I’m trying to tell you is that you should set them free. I’m right because the Cherokee’s deserve to come back. No you can’t force them to go because they should be able to choose to leave or not to leave.

So I feel that the Cherokee’s should come back. This is important because they should be free native americans. There just like us but in a different way. This is correct because bad things are really happening. Like a lot of them are dying. So you Andrew Jackson are wrong. Did they ever do anything to you. No they never did. So make a change and let them come back.

Sincerely, Cherokee Boy **(MM 11/17/2009)

Literary Essays (writing that is in response to/about text that we have read)** Bridge to Terabithia Bridge to Terabithia is kind of a sad book. It has a lot of adventure in it. This book "Bridge to Terabithia,"Is about a 10 year boy who want's to be the fastest kid around. When he meet's another 10 year old girl. When they find Terabithia everything changes. Jes want's to be the fastest kid around. So he pracites extra hard to be the fastest. So every morning he goes out and runs in the cow pasture. Then his little sister Maybell who just adores him comes out and finds him running. The next day a U-haul truck pulls into the drive way of the old Percan's house. The girl who moved in was a girl named Leslie. Her and Jes become great friends. They decide to make their own place where they make the rules. So they find an old rope swing that they swing across the creek on and land on the other side. They called this land Terabithia. The reason for this is to teach you that you should always have friends. This connects with a book called The Landry News. It connects because like Jes and Gary they get in a fight. Kind of like how Dr. Barnes and Mr. Larson get in a fight. In the end Leslie dies. She died because she went across the rope by herself and the rope snapped. Thsi story teaches me to always trust your friends. I would recommend this book to someone who likes adventure because in this book Leslie and Jes go on a lot of adventures together. Jes in the Bridge to Terabithis teaches me to always go on adventures and to not be scared to go on adventures. Jes really likes adventures.